At St Pius X this term the students have been writing Narratives. They are looking at the beginning, middle and end and trying to use good vocabulary to take their audience on a journey. Here is Catherine's from Room 8 beginning to her Narrative.
Kohanui Street was a fabulous Street. Many people always wanted too
walk down the street with their families. Often strangers from other
parts of town came as well. You would never think it wasn’t a good
place too walk.
Samara was a girl who lived by herself in a two
story house and never slept. She always gazed outside her window
keeping an eagle eye out for uninvited visitors. On a Saturday morning,
a little girl named Emily and her friend Charlotte walked pass
Samara’s house. They were bouncing a ball, then the ball landed on
Samara’s grass.
Emily walked on Samara’s lawn and Samara climbed
out of the well like a spider. Samara was out of the well like a flash
and grabbed the little girl and headed back to the well with Emily.
The look on Charlotte's face was indescribable, no one would have
recognised her if they had been there.
Charlotte ran home and
told her parents, but when she got there she discovered that they had
gone on vacation and left a baby sitter. She told the baby sitter what
had happened and described what Samara was wearing and what she looked
like. Charlotte said, “she had red eyes, long hair that covers her face
and her back, her hair was really long and she climbed out of the well
like a spider and grabbed Emily”. The baby sitter angrily said, “Go
to your room!”.
TO BE CONTINUED.........
To check out more of the narratives, click on these links.....
http://spxeneasiv.blogspot.com/
http://spxdanielt.blogspot.com/
12 comments:
I like your story. I liked your disruptive words it really got me interested.
Hello Cathrine
You wrote a really good story about a street that everyone loved to walk down.
Hello Catherine,
How are you doing?
I really enjoyed reading your story about Samara, Emily and Charlotte. The descriptive words about Samara made me read more.
Do you know what the rest of the story is going to be?
If you do comment on my blog.
This story has a lot of describing words.
Hi Cathrine
Im really impresssed with your fantastic story. Keep up the good work.
From Efaraima
I St Pius X
This story is a really good adventure and the story is like a real adventure with Samara and Emily but the house was a BIG house.
KEEP UP THE GOOD STORY WRITTING!
I enjoyed that story about Emily and the well.Good work.
I really liked what you wrote about a girl in the well and when she grabbed another girl. Well done, keep it up.
What great narratives. Your class is very lucky to do this. Keep it up.
What great narratives. Your class is very lucky to do this. Keep it up.
I like what you wrote about that girl in the well andthe other girl that got grabbed by her and got taked to the well.
Hi st. Pius x I enjoyed your reading your narratives it looks like yous are doing a great job doing your narratives good job keep up with your work.
By Rachel
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