Friday, February 26, 2010

Anita's Morning Tea Recount

Writing recounts can be challenging, however I have done very well using lots of my learning from last year and this year......I want to make my audience picture what I am experiencing.

Morning Tea time begane at the ring of the bell. Miss G quickly dismissed us as it was Morning Tea. My friends and I rushed to the corridor, grabbed our lunch and rushed outside.

The weather was extremely hot! As I sat down the seat was burning. If felt like I sat on an oven. I gently stood up and walked away. As I walked along to the tennis court sweat was dripping down from my forehead.


It was interesting to find little children shouting as if they were watching a baseball game! The game they were playing looked extremely exhausting. I stumbled to the senior park where there were children whose faces were lit with excitement. The ground beneath me seemed to disappear as I climbed up the bridge.


I sat there, staring at the pole in front of me. Suddenly out of the corner of my eye I saw a blurry figure approaching me slowly. I felt as if I was being followed......the figure turned out to be Robert. He clearly asked me if I wanted to play with him. I gleefully took his offer. We walked slowly to the tennis courts.

Five minutes ticked by slowly. Suddenly I heard a faint ringing sound growing louder and louder. One by one, two by two people were departing the tennis courts.....not until then did I realise it was the end of morning tea. The electric bell shrilled confirming that it really was the end of morning tea time.

Anita

4 comments:

Miss Walker said...

Hi Anita. I enjoyed reading your piece of writing. I especially liked your description of the weather being so hot. I felt like I was right there sitting on that burning seat and desperately needing a drink of water.
Well done.

nita said...

hi anita that recount was great no mistakes just excellent:)

Angelica and Agnes said...

Hey Anita I really like this piece of writing of yours...

I like the way you expressed your feelings...

Continue the hard work...

Great work...

kristhr said...

Hi Anita. My name is Kristen and I attend the University of South Alabama. I thought this piece of writing was awesome. You used some really good adjectives and made me think I was write there in the story. Good job!